一、句子之间缺少过渡性的单词或词组
① Salmons swim upstream, they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.
② Salmons swim upstream, an d then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.
二、省字号（）的滥用
① the governments plan
② the plan of the government
三、代词之间的性、数、格不一致
① Everyone has their homewk.
② Everyone has his （ her） homewk.
四、主句与从句的顺序不当
① Some of the new dotcom millionaires found out the party was over, after the NASDAQ value ped by over two thirds.
② After the NASDAQ value ped by over two thirds, some of the new dotcom millionaires found out the party was over.
五、双重否定
① Barely no one noticed that the pop star lipsynched during the whole perfmance.
② Barely anyone noticed that the pop star lipsynched during the whole perfmance.
六、修饰语、插入语的位置不当
① The fest fire, no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, jumped the firebreak.
② No longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, the fest fire jumped the firebreak.
七、意义含糊的先行词
① The band members collected his an d her unifms.
② The band members collected their unifms.
八、介词和冠词的滥用
① The project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.
② The government project reduces the production costs of private firms.
九、句子缺少成分
① When aiming f the highest returns, an d also thinking about the possible losses.
② When aiming f the highest returns, invests also should think about the possible losses.
十、忘记断句
① I do not recall what kind of printer it was all I remember is that it could st, staple, an d print a packet at the same time.
② I do not recall what kind of printer it was. All I remember is that it could st, staple, an d print a packet at the same time.
